12.18.2011

Sunday Scribble


  

image by Lee Friedlander, 1966




Leftover

you have taken your piece

from the middle and now 

only edges and angles remain

hard parts, rough crust 

crumbs of myself, really

not enough to keep, I wish

you had finished, if only

you had thought

to have eaten me whole


-- smh






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15 comments:

Kathe W. said...

so intense-wow.

Carolina Linthead said...

Love this one! Very good take on the prompt, with some hard edges, for sure.

Jinksy said...

I like your interpretation of this strange image...

Allie said...

Wow - this one really brought some intense feelings out in me - very, very good Susan!

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Scary shadow!
Great!

Kim Nelson said...

Although a completely unique take on the prompt, this piece conveys a relationship, a situation familiar to many. I appreciate how art and allusion can so aptly illustrate many a human condition.

Leenie said...

Hmmm. This reminds me of all the people who eat the pizza and leave the crust. I love a good pizza crust. Appreciating the edges and the angles and the hard parts of a personality is not always easy, but often worth the effort.

Nicely done! Made me think in a very different way.

zongrik said...

i keep picturing that office holiday cake from Costco...

Isabel Doyle said...

wow! this one will linger and draw my imagination

great response to the promt

Helen said...

Taking from the middle, the heart .. leaving the rest!
Great interpretation of that photo ... Happy Holidays.

Shawna said...

This is probably my favorite so far. Great line breaks, words, and rhythm. Love it.

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Brian Miller said...

oh this is a hot write...i like it ...the voice is great and evocative as well as you unveil it is you that he should have eaten whole...nice...

Ms. Geek Goddess said...

Wow! I love this! Such an amazing write! :)

Tumblewords: said...

Wonderful take on the image!

Suz said...

mmmm nice
I think I'm a fan

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