5.28.2010

Friday Frippery . . .

                                  




Trailing


She has walked away

her shoes, carelessly

left to trip

others and someone

must sweep up

the dirt tracked in

polish and put them

away behind her, but

where is she now and what

will be done

about her bare feet?


                                       --smh



This poem is a Magpie Tale.  
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Happy Weekend!




17 comments:

Allie said...

I think you should put your poetry in your work, Susan, you have such a talent with words!

susan m hinckley said...

Thanks, Allie -- I'm actually trying to move in that direction, so the encouragement is doubly appreciated.

kathew said...

Great Magpie- reminded me of how I was as a teenager....my mothers words came floating back to me via your work.

She Writes said...

A mother's post? The worry of dirtied floors and bared feet! Her worry is never done.

Caty said...

reminds me of sharing a room with my sister and always cleaning up after her. nice work!

Kimmie said...

leaves me less worried about the untidiness of it and more worried about my grown up baby's bare feet and where oh where she might be. My, how we tried small worries for bigger ones.

Helen said...

I read your poem and an image of one of Jane Austin's novels popped into my mind .... I could 'see' the young aristocrat running into her country home ... from her walk through the fields and woods .....
wonderful!

~T~ said...

Sounds familiar, though these shoes can't possibly track in as much dirt as my sons' baseball cleats!
Thanks for your comment on mine. My mom is a Hinckley, too. We must be related :)

Tumblewords: said...

What a familiar tale! Well said and surely a fun read!

Jennifer Morrison said...

I love the new story created in the last three lines! In this bit of imagery you've created a character I want to know. Well done!

mypoeticlicense said...

As a mother of a slobby little girl, I absolutely loved this. She shined through, although you don't even know her!

- Dina

Yemalla said...

It's much like a Zen koan. I love it!

Sue J said...

I enjoyed this. I seem to have spent most of my life picking up after others :(

Brian Miller said...

oh but i like bare feet al the more so once the shoes are off we would have left all the more the trail...nice magpie!

willow said...

Love-love that ending!

Lyn said...

All I can say, is go girl, go!! Time enough for shoes..

Jingle said...

awesome logic and beautiful word play...
happy Tuesday!

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