a grave at Novodevichy Cemetery, Moscow
Intention
if I held your heart
if I held your heart
felt it pulse against my palms
or balanced it on fingertips
to watch its push and pull
would it cut, all points and edges
try to wriggle out, become
a flopping love-fish on the floor
ooze and bleed desire, effusive
quiver, gel-like, undecided
let me see inside it, search its rooms
or offer nothing, not a clue of any kind
but make instead a flatline of itself
and wait to be set down again?
-- smh
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14 comments:
excellent juxtaposition between a real heart and the romantic heart...
"Flopping love-fish on the floor" is brilliant.
I'm with Tess; that's what jumped out at me - really cool!
love it,
amazing propositions.
ok i chuckled a bit at flop like a fish...smiles..def a nice contrast you draw in responses of the heart...and it is that wide ranged...
Very clever response to the prompt. One does wonder if some hearts are so hard and cold they would cut anyone who tried to hold them. While other hearts are seem so soft they might slide right through a grasp.
Love the word images.
One of my favorites this week.
=)
Oh! This is superb!
The love fish line gets a thumbs up from me too...brilliant.
Love. This. So. Much. You are BRILLIANT, girl.
Wow! You have so many rich, lush, descriptive words in this beautifully composed poem.
your words make my eyes open wide,
very beautiful plot.
"Make instead a flatline of itself" is a particularly ingenious line amongst many.
Wow! Wonderful words!
Anna :o]
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