Target Practice
your words make it hard
to see you, so deep
a cloud, dense
with verbs and nouns
darts and parts
of speech, thick like wind
pointed as glass shards
but maybe just a shell
defending soft places
they sail, they shoot
they drift out, a murmur
a whisper of far away
thoughts, mere hints of what
you mean for me to hear
--smh
This poem is a Magpie Tale.
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13 comments:
your words are full of texture.
love your entry.
smiles.
Susan, queen of textiles and master of poetry I salute you. Your magpie tale says volumes in such a few small parts of speech.
RE: Drawing Conclusions--keep up the good work! I'm thoroughly impressed. Now I'm going off to look for a big, fat, sugary hunk of self pity. Then I'll beat myself with a carrot. It's softer than a stick.
Leenie, you never fail to make me smile. If I have a choice, I'll pick the donut every time. But I really deserve the stick.
WONDERFUL magpie - you draw with words too, Susan! I'm enjoying your drawing exercises btw, and thrilled to see each new one, totally impressed with your talent!
Cooper leaving slime on floors? I would think he has more class than than that. I seem to remember he is an idiosyncratic dresser and chocolate besides. Not only that, he and I must be related. Cooper is my maiden name.
Very rich, and as Jingle says, textured. Really enjoyed it, and I think first time to visit - love the look of your site. Are u on twitter - leave me a comment on blog and maybe we could link up.
I agree whole-heartedly with 120 Socks beautiful poem
You have a beautiful way with words ....
Agree with Allie, you do draw images with your skillfully chosen words. Somehow always just exactly enough. Beautiful!
lovely-- an honest and imagistic poem. xxxj
Words can build a wall against intimacy sometimes. Great poem:-)
Love this - we all cloak ourselves in words at times, thinking we give so much of ourselves away, but in essence giving nothing, no clues. Bravo!
Anna :o]
unique take on the prompt and so true--great magpie!
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