Trailing
She has walked away
her shoes, carelessly
left to trip
others and someone
must sweep up
the dirt tracked in
polish and put them
away behind her, but
where is she now and what
will be done
about her bare feet?
--smh
This poem is a Magpie Tale.
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17 comments:
I think you should put your poetry in your work, Susan, you have such a talent with words!
Thanks, Allie -- I'm actually trying to move in that direction, so the encouragement is doubly appreciated.
Great Magpie- reminded me of how I was as a teenager....my mothers words came floating back to me via your work.
A mother's post? The worry of dirtied floors and bared feet! Her worry is never done.
reminds me of sharing a room with my sister and always cleaning up after her. nice work!
leaves me less worried about the untidiness of it and more worried about my grown up baby's bare feet and where oh where she might be. My, how we tried small worries for bigger ones.
I read your poem and an image of one of Jane Austin's novels popped into my mind .... I could 'see' the young aristocrat running into her country home ... from her walk through the fields and woods .....
wonderful!
Sounds familiar, though these shoes can't possibly track in as much dirt as my sons' baseball cleats!
Thanks for your comment on mine. My mom is a Hinckley, too. We must be related :)
What a familiar tale! Well said and surely a fun read!
I love the new story created in the last three lines! In this bit of imagery you've created a character I want to know. Well done!
As a mother of a slobby little girl, I absolutely loved this. She shined through, although you don't even know her!
- Dina
It's much like a Zen koan. I love it!
I enjoyed this. I seem to have spent most of my life picking up after others :(
oh but i like bare feet al the more so once the shoes are off we would have left all the more the trail...nice magpie!
Love-love that ending!
All I can say, is go girl, go!! Time enough for shoes..
awesome logic and beautiful word play...
happy Tuesday!
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