7.26.2010

Magpie Monday 3.0

  


 
Forever

I'll leave the bed unmade

until you return --

undone with waiting, softly

rumpled with welcome

the crumbs of my worry

brushed away, a place where we

can fall together again

my foot looped over your bent knee

the lamp light a moon

in our night sky -- perhaps

it would be best if we both make it

pulling the sheet up tightly

tucking the wrinkles, corners smoothed

so we can leave together

but for now it will wait with me 

unmade and ready 

--smh 




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Happy Back-at-it-Monday!
  



17 comments:

kathew said...

what an eloquent poem- bravo

Helen said...

I like your 'Magpie Monday' theme and I really enjoyed this!

Tumblewords: said...

Nicely done!

Jim Swindle said...

I really like this poem. Thanks for writing it and for sharing it.

signed...bkm said...

lovely and beautiful peice...nice magpie...bkm

Stafford Ray said...

Ummm... referring to the last two lines. Is it you that is unmade and the bed ready or the bed unmade and you are ready? Time for a bucket of cold water! :-)

Karen S said...

A lovely, sweet poem. Except for the crumbs.

Jingle said...

very cute and remarkable tale.

spacedlaw said...

A little sad but nicely done.

Jim Swindle said...

"Except for the crumbs?" That was my favorite part of the poem.

Ah, people are so different. :-)

Gabriela Abalo said...

Nice poem,

Great Magpie

gospelwriter said...

Beautiful! I love what's expressed here and what isn't, and the way it all comes together.

susan m hinckley said...

Thanks, all, for the kind words.

Funny, Jim, the crumbs were my favorite part too. It's always interesting to see which parts of your writing speak to others and which images evoke a response, isn't it?

willow said...

I love that opening line!

RA said...

I loved the ending. Absolutely magnificent! :)

luanne said...

I loved the crumbs too. And all the rest of it. Your poems amaze me.

susan m hinckley said...

Thanks, LuAnne! They are nearer and dearer to my heart than my needlework is, actually, so I'm doubly pleased when people enjoy them.

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